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Reviewer: Silver Trails Signed [Report This]
Date: January 21, 2016 - 09:37 am
Title: Chapter 1

Oh, this is perfect! The emotions run deep, but not overly so. Very good!

Reviewer: clotho123 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 14, 2009 - 05:42 pm
Title: Chapter 1

A good take on a very shadowy relationship.  Starting with the outright clash of two fiery temperaments, then taking an unexpected but wholly convincing turn as Curufin pulls off one last manipulation.

The one thing which I have created that did not go awry.

A single line that says a great deal

Reviewer: oshun Signed [Report This]
Date: July 19, 2008 - 09:15 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Wow! Great story. Complex emotion without trying to squeeze the story into the framework of narrow moral imperatives. I agree with others that the style fits the subject matter. The tone is just right.

Reviewer: whitewave Signed [Report This]
Date: July 13, 2008 - 11:18 am
Title: Chapter 1

This was very intense.  Wish I had read it sooner.  Felt bad about how father and son had to part because of the effects of the Oath.  There were so many good lines, but the one that affected me most was how Curvo wished for his son to be safe even if they have to part.  Your version is very plausible in that Celebrimbor's dying words. 

Reviewer: Dawn Felagund Signed [Report This]
Date: May 06, 2008 - 12:54 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Hi, Aria! I saw that you posted this a while back, but I missed the chance to read and review it. With a spare moment at work today, I am catching up on stories I wanted to read, and I am glad that I finally got to read this one. Wow ... what a heartbreaking piece! The style you use here fits it perfectly, I think, with your use of contrasts drawing my attention to the details; bringing characters to life on the page. But I think my favorite line, the one that did me in and realize that this story had my heart,

Since when does he disobey me, this wild untried youth? Since when did he learn carpentry? Since when is he so stubborn? Since when did he become grown? "Hold thy tongue and listen."

Beautiful work!

Reviewer: Robinka Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08, 2008 - 02:11 pm
Title: Chapter 1

What Rhapsy said, I totally agree. The thing I like about this piece in particular is the way in which you've constructed it. The beginning -- a fine bit of description of Celebrimbor, his work, how he focuses on it -- wonderfully unfolds and shows Curufin's realization that his son has indeed grown up. The past finely merges with the present in his rampaging thoughts, when he struggles to accept his son's attitude and choices.

Very emotional and touching story, very nicely written. Thank you a lot for sharing :)

All the best + welcome to SWG,

Binka 

Reviewer: Rhapsody Signed [Report This]
Date: April 08, 2008 - 12:53 pm
Title: Chapter 1

Oh brilliant, this is a marvellous piece. What I so like about it is the train of thoughts: swift, calculating, wondering, questioning. The realisation that his son has grown up and still the fatherly instinct, the plotting. It all comes out so well in this piece. Well done!




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