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Reviewer: just_jenni Signed [Report This]
Date: February 20, 2017 - 08:34 am
Title: Chapter 1

This is so beautifully written that it soars to a whole new level for me.  The descriptions are gorgeous and bring such life to everything in the story: the characters, places and ideas.  I've always wondered how the Maiar and Eldar could experience love together and loved the idea of it.  You've written about it more eloquently than anything I've before read.

 

The little added things are delightful: the mention of refugees and the truth of what they bring; the gentle humour in things like Cirdan's almost loss of control when he accepts Osse's offer and in Osse's changing appearances which almost frighten him.

 

This story was a truly awesome read; I was so blown away by it!



Author's Response: Thanks so much for your kind comments, Jenni. I always enjoy writing unconventional pairings so it's satisfying to know this relationship reads well and that you enjoyed it. Thanks also for mentioning the little touches about the refugees and the rest. I wanted the setting to seem plausible but still feel like a fantasy. I'm thrilled with this review and so glad you like the story.

Reviewer: oshun Signed [Report This]
Date: February 16, 2017 - 05:39 pm
Title: Chapter 1

First of all, I love that introductory verse. I got all caught up in that poem when I doing the Tolkien seafarer stuff a couple of years ago.

I love the seaport introductory business--I love seaports in general! And Círdan expected a storm, but getting an old friends in a very hawt human form.

“Ossë, I might have known it was you from your grand entrance. I hope the storm will not catch any other ships coming in unawares.”

“Do not worry. It has largely blown itself out and there are no other ships nearby. I made sure of that before I set sail.”

Like, actually, he made the storm! Great touch.

I love the way you write Círdan and I am very attached to Osse also and his very special relationship with the Teleri.

Very happy also that it has a sweet and fluffy ending. I like the fact that Osse uses more than one human-modeled corporeal form! That is very cute and playful of him. It is also cute how Círdan takes it in stride.

Nice work beginning to end.



Author's Response: I've always loved that poem, and many others from that era. I thought it fit the theme of the story pretty well too, Cirdan coming to terms with his past and finally able to find some peace. The bustling seaport is always a great image so that was fun to write as well. Thanks for your comments about Cirdan. I'm not, like, super into the character but when I read this prompt I knew just what I wanted to do. It seemed so perfect for the pairing. It's also fun to play with the look of the Maia since, in my world anyway, they can choose a form like we'd choose an outfit. I'm a sucker for a happy ending so you knew these two would get one. Cirdan was around a long time and he deserves a day at the beach once in awhile. Heck, we all do. Thanks not only for your sweet comments but for the beta. You're always there for me and I appreciate it.




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