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Reviewer: Zdenka Signed [Report This]
Date: August 20, 2017 - 08:27 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I like this!It must be an alien change to have to cope with, from bird to woman and from stars to solid ground again. I like the way they support each other, and how they help put each other back together.



Author's Response:

I think it would be difficult to cope with and they would really need each others' support, but they would be there for each other.

Thank you very much for commenting here, too! (I think you also gave me a kudos on AO3.)

Reviewer: Hrymfaxe Signed [Report This]
Date: August 11, 2017 - 12:13 pm
Title: Chapter 1

What a punch in a short piece! I'm completely in love with the way Elwing takes some time to transition from gull to woman and how Eärendil needs to unthaw from the deep space he has been exploring. You hint at so many things here, that I can hardly believe the story is less than 200 words...



Author's Response:

Thank you very much!

I still acutely remember your drawing of Elwing and the gulls, it left a lasting impression. 

That's some time ago now, isn't it? But I think this plot bunny (if this piece can be said to have a plot, exactly) was with me even before that.

Reviewer: Robinka Signed [Report This]
Date: August 11, 2017 - 06:23 am
Title: Chapter 1

They seem so unreal as they story has ever been to me, and yet I can almost hear Elwing's gull like shriek.

Excellent job! Thank you :)

Author's Response:

I'm glad it worked and I made you hear the shriek!

Thank you very much!

Reviewer: ziggy Signed [Report This]
Date: August 10, 2017 - 03:35 am
Title: Chapter 1

I love the way you make her a flapping cawing gull, and earendil like his ship's rigging- really effective imagery.  I never liked Elwing so have no sympathy for her but the strangeness of their story is brought sharply into focus here- like a folktale. I like the way you point out that it is never resolved though and that hanging ending gives it a poignancy I don't find in Tolkien.



Author's Response:

Thank you, ziggy! Good to hear the imagery works for you.

Whether one likes Elwing or not, her story starts with displacement and the loss of her parents and siblings and ends by taking her even farther away--a strange story, as you say.

I think Tolkien wants it to be a happy end, but it seems to me that he only achieves that by looking at it and describing it from a distance.

Reviewer: Lyra Signed [Report This]
Date: August 10, 2017 - 03:13 am
Title: Chapter 1

I'm amazed how much you've got going on in this short piece. The consideration you've given to the practicalities of their particular situation is brilliant - Elwing's birdlike shriek, Eärendil's frozen tongue, the calming and warming influence they exert on each other. The way in which she needs to return to being human, and in which he needs to find his way back into the world of speech. Following their exchange (and change) was quite exhilarating, and I suspect this fic is going to reverberate with me for quite a while.

Author's Response:

Thank you!

I actually managed to leave out a line that had seemed important before I started writing. Now I wonder whether I should take that as a sign that it wasn't such a good idea after all or whether I was just too out of it, at the time of writing.

"As she un-birds, he un-stars."

<<stares dubiously at line>>

Maybe I'll put in the summary or the notes.

Reviewer: Keiliss Signed [Report This]
Date: August 09, 2017 - 11:02 pm
Title: Chapter 1

I loved the feel of it, Himring. They would be like this, they would talk each other down. They would be a team - after all, there is no one else like them over there. 



Author's Response:

Thank you very much, Kei!

I know you have thought about this pair and so I'm especially glad to hear from you that this piece feels right!




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