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Comments For Bedtime Tales of the Sun
I thought this story was great! (As is everything you write, of course). I loved how it was written in a way that almost made it feel like a fairytale, and also the poetry that you interspersed was gorgeous. The ending was especially powerful.
Thank you! I'm not fully happy with this piece ... I'm not fully happy with my poetry, full stop, in the vast majority of instances! :D But you've mentioned here two things that I was definitely trying to do, which is give it a fairy-tale/folkloric feel and make the poetry work with the link pieces. I'm thrilled that these things came through for you. Thanks so much for your kind words and encouragement!
I love the poetry. It truly fits the work better than prose would have.
(I came here to respond to a new comment and realized I never answered you! I'm so sorry! :( )
I am still very wincy about most of my poetry. I am so happy that it worked for you! I remember writing it in my parents' car on our way to Williamsburg. I had such a clear idea of what I wanted to do and don't feel I'm quite there yet, but it's very encouraging to think I'm on my way, at least. :) Thank you for your kind comment!
I loved this, Dawn! The idea of irreversible change has been on my mind since writing "Wrong Way to..." I like how your character ponders on it, too, and how she comes back to look at that horizon in older age and feels that same stirring she felt as child. You've managed to say so much with this piece, I think new meanings will come every time I read it.
(I'm so sorry I haven't responded to this till now. I came to reply to another comment and realized I had left several unanswered. Bad 'gund! :( )
I have to say that this comment is giving me that happy butterflies-in-the-stomach feeling. :) Of all the stories on my list here, this is one where I feel it doesn't yet reach what I want it to be in my mind. I had a lot going on in my mind, too, as I wrote it, but poetry is and probably always will be difficult for me. I'm so glad that it worked for you, and that you liked it. Thank you for your comment!
The imagery in this, and the way that the interspersed poetry indicates passage of time - I like this a lot!
Thank you! I wrote most of the poetry in the car on the way to Williamsburg! :^P (I wasn't driving.)
Spoken very much in Tolkien-style verse and woven with clever poetry. I like the fairytale aspect of your tale and the way you portray the passage of time. You also have me imagining Arien's ship on cruise control so she can take the occasional nap.
Oh noes, don't give me any ideas! :D Thanks so much for reading and reviewing, Cirdan. Also, a belated welcome to SWG; my apologies for not saying hi sooner, but I was away this weekend past.