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The Blue Book of Bilbo Baggins, or, Tales of the Forbidden Silmarillion by Gandalfs apprentice

Rated: General | [Comments - 13]
Summary: As readers know from Tyellas's Lost in the Translation, Bilbo made another book--one with a blue cover. This story tells of the fate of this mysterious volume, and, even better, has extracts from some of the tales....you know you want to read it. Seriously AU. Illustrations by greywing.

Thanks to Tyellas for allowing me to borrow the idea of the Blue Book from her superb story and to oshun for her thoughtful criticism and for being a good friend. Special thanks to Maeve Riannon and to greywing for their unique contributions, and to all the writers at the Garden of Ithilien.
Characters: Ainur, Beren, Dior, Elu Thingol, Glorfindel, Idril, Lúthien Tinúviel, Maeglin, Manwë, Melkor, Nienna, Sauron, Sons of Fëanor, Tuor, Uinen, Ulmo, Valar, Varda
Challenges: None
Genres: Drama, Humor
Warnings: Mature Themes
Series: None
Chapters: 8 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 8041     Read Count: 9071
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Published: June 05, 2007     Updated: June 05, 2007


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Of Uinen and the Children of Numenor

Beautiful! The words were picked quite well and the story flowed smoothly. I love your depiction of Uinen here; her thoughts, her emotions, her actions, her secrets... There was only one mention of her husband here in a direct relation to her, but I thought it sweet anyway. My favourite parts are the first paragraph, where Bilbo talked about Aragorn's achievements and how the hobbit could not be there for the latter, and Uinen favourite place in Numenor - yes, and also that one line about her husband.

 

Her changing the children of the doomed island into sea creatures was totally unexpected and quite original. I love it too! That was sweet, sad and bitter at once... I felt like wanting to cry myself. Your interpretation hitted home truer than the one in the Silmarillion; perhaps because of its explicitness. Here you managed to portray the reason why Uinen was called the Gentle.

 

However, one thing nagged at me: Ulmo sort of condemned her - in a way - to be the guardian of those of the exiled and forsaken... It was ironic, seeing that he was the only Vala that was most ready to succor the exiled Noldor and the Men and the Sindar in Middle Earth... Ah yeah, and why did you say "the false Noldor"? They were like traitors to their kindred, yes, but they were not... fake.

 



Author's Response:

"False" can mean treacherous, in fact. It's an old-fashioned use of the word, and therefore appropriate for this story.

 G.A.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 2: The Judgment of Tuor

Ahahahaha! AU! LOL But that was hilarious! By the way, would you please describe the image to me? I am sight-impaired and the screen reader does not read picture except to tell (sometimes) that they are pictures by way of saying "graphic (insert title of the picture here)."

 

I wondered why Aragorn thought about Tuor that way about Tuor... but then I found out why. Hahaha! That came as quite a surprise, though. That was so original! I wonder what Varda would do should her spouse choose Nienna or Yavannah... By the way, though, I never saw Yavannah as related to love.

 

The offers of the Valier somehow reminded me of the three temptations of Evil to Jesus in the desert in the Bible... Mmm. You encompassed the points that people often relate to men's weaknesses: power, love and treasure. LOL But I have never seen one categorise pursuit of wisdom as one of men's weaknesses... :)

 

Hmm. Here Idril was Maeglin's rightful wife? So who was Maeglin here - still her cousin from her aunt Aredhal? Uh-oh... I thought Turgon would not allow such marriage between close kins, especially which happened to his beloved daughter...

 

I like the ending of this chapter. Such an anticlimax! Hee... Dunno. It somehow showed that Yavannah was not that kind on him...

 



Author's Response:

This story is a blatant takeoff on the Judgment of Paris from Greek mythology. In that story, Paris chooses Love in the form of Helen as his reward.

Regarding cousin marriage--I'm turning Tolkien on his head deliberately in these tales.

The picture shows a rather scared Tuor surrounded by three beautiful ladies.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 3: How Luthien Stole the Silmaril

Ha! So that was why Bilbo go

t the tale from Beorn... I was wondering why. Great job, again! Your ideas were so original and therefore pleasantly unexpected. The scenes here were so amusing too! *fall out of the bed laughing* (LOL Yes, I am reading on the bed. :P)

 

There was some semblence to the Silmarillion, but that was all. Your AU rendering was much appreciated here. ;D I love the depiction of her plot (it was more vivid than in the Silmarillion, and again you chose a good spot to emphasise). But, actually the things I love the most are the scenes when Luthien was a cat, especially when she neatened up herself in a catlike manner (Hahaha!), her encounter with Tevildo (Poor prince, forsaken by his lord...), Luthien's statement that she would hunt the mice under Morgoth's throne and how she carried the promise out (Wee hee hee... I thought Morgoth did not pay attention to the cleanliness of his visinity... ;)), and how she interacted with Morgoth (sweet, somehow). I totally love this chapter! Although I do not particularly like the ending of this... Dunno why.



Author's Response: The ending is a borrowing from beast fable. More of my mix-up mythology.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 4: Beren and the Troll Hag

So the lesson was that a husband should give way to his wife in all wishes, eh? ;D LOL

 

Great piece! Although, I am still wondering why there were two different pieces about Luthien here... Hmm. Is somehow this piece not connected to the last? But then how is it possible, given the supposed fact that they are in a single book?

 

I could see from which fairytale you took this piece from. It was not an original idea, or at least in terms of the troll-hag being a beautiful lady (Luthien no less!); however, I applaud the details in here, which looked as original as ever. (Well, to me, making Luthien cursed by the wolf was original too. It was Carcharoth who had cursed her, was it not?)

 

Elu's depictions were impressive here. But that reminds me... I think there are two pictures - one here and one in the last chapter. Would you please describe them also? Or are they already described - with no detail left - in the respective chapters? (I forgot to state the latter possibility. :))

 

Still, good job in this! And it indeed seems like Bilbo's knack to collect hilarious stories told in a no-less humorous point of view. ;D

 



Author's Response:

The Blue Book is imagined as a haphazard compilation of tales of all sorts. Someday I mean to add more tales.....if I live that long.

 

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 5: The Passions of Manwe

*groan* Firstly, I would like to apologise for what I am about to say...

 

I do not like this piece, although it was humorous on its own right. The Valar could not beget children, Tolkien stated at last (after tweaking here and there with the idea), and I stick myself to it. However, since this is an AU, I am not going to dispute it.

 

By the way, why did the Lord of the Winds never know peace afterwards? Was he harassed by Varda or the other Valar or Glorfindel? :)

 

If you did not warn that the Glorfindel (either of the two) there was not the hero we know, I would have still believed that he was the Lord of the Golden Flower (and I would be more displeased).

 

If seen from an objective point of view, this piece was amusing. But I wonder why the solemn tone of the first chapter degraded towards more and more humorous ones in later chapters...

 



Author's Response:

You've rightly caught that the tales "degrade" from high-toned to bawdy. That was deliberate on my part. I wanted to get more and more outrageous as the tales progress.

These tales are deliberately NOT strict canon. That is the idea of the story. In part I am trying to point out what I regard as limp and dull in Tolkien's legendarium, particularly the hung-up attitude about sex. As in, there is none. Most "real" mythologies are certainly not like that.

 

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 6: The Great Mother

Hmm. You did not mention the name Glorfindel in the tale of the Great Mother. :) Was it intentional? The readers would not relate the name to the Great Mother this way...

 

The story was original, although I do not particularly like this piece. You created the reason for the earthquakes and the mountain eruptions in a very inventive way, and how the men and women came into being too. Good job! :)

 

And so the men usurped the women? ;) Mmm. If it is true that Bilbo got the tale from the Silvan Elves, than probably they were matrilineal. Hahaha!



Author's Response: Part of my sly intent here is to hint that the "proper" Silmarillion censored older tales of a matriarchal culture.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 7: Master Aelfwine Disposes

Hahahahahaha!!! Oh my... But I thought he was a Rohirrim. It turned out he was a Gondorian. Hmm.

 

I did not get the idea about the king ordering Elfwine to do something... What did he ordered the scholar (or so I presume) to do? Pardon me, my English is not so excellant and I am not a native speaker of it anyway.

 

The chapter was short, but it was a good conclution for the whole story. I had thought that there would be some peak into the Blue Book, though, before I finished reading this piece... :) Did you name the poor apprentice boy, by the way? I am curious.

 

When Elfwine said "the usual," I got a sneaking suspicion that he had done it before... Naughty Elfwine. ;D



Author's Response:

The king is here ordering Elfwine to "clean up" the shocking and bawdy tales he discovered in the (uncensored) Silmarillion. The idea is that the Sil as Tolkien gives it to us is a bowdlerized version of ancient down and dirty mythology.

 

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 8: Notes from the Translator

*bend double in laughter* A convincing small essay with some of the most hilarious names in all of Arda and the modern earth! *thumbs up*

 

Well, I do wonder what is the relation between Maglor tuning his harp and the red-haireds twins away in a hunt... But that was all, and finally I saw some things I had overlooked when reading... LOL I had thought the story with the Great Mother original. *look betrayed* Hee...

 

You were rather sarcastic here, but it provided some of the humor in this last piece. :) Good job overall, GA. ^_^



Author's Response:

My intent was deliberate borrowings from myths of the world, in particular Greek but also Arthurian and some Hawaiian. Much more could be done!

 

Lessons from the Mountain by MithLuin

Rated: General | [Comments - 23]
Summary:

What happened to the spirit of Maedhros when he died?


Characters: Maedhros, Mandos
Challenges: Halls of Mystery
Genres: General
Warnings: Character Death, Violence--Moderate
Series: None
Chapters: 16 Table of Contents
Completed: No
Word count: 65034     Read Count: 32216
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Published: January 27, 2008     Updated: June 04, 2012


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Prologue: The Halls of Waiting

A great piece! But I wish you used the Quenya form of the names instead of the Sindarin one... It seemed odd here somehow...

 

The last sentence was amusing somehow. I can't really explain it, but it's... just like that. So the "mountain" here meant Thangorodrim? I thought it was Himring but then I corrected it myself and became lost to what actually the "mountain" refered here was... LOL

 

My hair stood on end when reading many parts of this chapter. You did quite well with the atmosphere! :) You described Maedhros' emotions and thoughts pretty well too. I just wonder what about the puddle of water on the floor... I thought, with the pristine condition of the rest of the room (mmm, I would not call it a cell :P), there should not be a puddle of water there - like what we could find in a cave... Your description that the floor was constructed from stones of various colours took me off guard too.

 

The Lord of Mandos was quite in character here. He was not all stony and forbidding, but he was not gay like Tulkas or Nessa or even his brothers. I love his dialogues here, and his interactions with Maedhros (although you managed to unnerve me too by the latter LOL). Great job! I will read-review the next chapter when I am back to this site again. :)



Author's Response:

Ahh, yes....to Quenya or not to Quenya?  I must admit that I struggled with that choice throughout this story.  The first fanfic that I read which used the Quenya names for the characters I found bewildering, and the last thing I want to do is completely confuse the issue of who the story is even about.  But...Tolkien went to so much effort to establish when and where certain languages were used, that I don't want to just mash them up, either.  My beta is more into language than I am, so I should probably ask for more of his input on this question. 

 As far as this intro chapter goes, though....  No names (and thus, no elvish) is used prior to Mandos speaking.  And it seemed natural to me that in this formal context, he would address Maedhros in Quenya, using the name he'd been given as a child.  Quenya is, after all, Maedhros' first tongue.  'Feanor' was only given that name posthumously; he was Feanaro for as long as he lived. 

 But Maedhros has been living in Middle Earth, among other elves and men, for hundreds of years, where the common language is Sindarin.  He may very well have continued to use Quenya in private, but publically, everything was Sindarin.  He was Maedhros, not Maitimo/Nelyafinwe/Russandol/etc.  So, I ended up deciding that he'd think of himself as Maedhros, as much for the ease of the reader as for the historical reality.  But when Namo speaks to him, it would be natural for them to converse in Quenya, not Sindarin.  If he converses with someone from Middle Earth, though, again....Sindarin.  I suspect I have not been as consistent with this as I would like, but there are my thoughts on the matter, anyway.  

 Yes, that last line was meant to be amusing.  My story is rather dark/heavy/angsty, but I've sprinkled a bit of this understated humor throughout, because even death and judgement can have its petty annoyances.   Yep, the 'mountain' here (and in the title) is Thangorodrim, even though Himring is clearly the most important mountain in Maedhros' life.  From the standpoint of the Halls of Mandos, the isolated experience on Thangorodrim may have been more significant.  Maedhros changed there.  

 I am glad to hear the atmosphere was sufficiently creepy!  My goal with the Halls of Mandos is to keep them a bit mysterious and other worldly.  Maedhros (and the reader) can get a bit comfortable and acheive a certain degree of familiarity there, but it's never going to be...cozy.  You're right, it's not a cell.  But Maedhros views the place as a prison, and so... The Lord of Mandos may continue to be unnerving, but he will also become a bit more personable.  

 Thank you so much for reviewing, wind rider!  I have been meaning to finish up this story, but I was completely dissatisfied with the last two chapters I wrote and will probably be starting over from scratch.  It's unfortunate, but I blame Feanor and a corrupt jump drive.  So, it will not be continued/finished any time soon, but I *will* finish it.  Really.  There are about 2 chapters and an epilogue left, if it goes as planned.  

Cultural Differences by Keiliss

Rated: Adult | [Comments - 4]
Summary:

Cultural differences, a young king, an arrogant Maia, and rather too much wine.


Characters: Eönwë, Gil-galad
Challenges: None
Genres: Experimental
Warnings: Sexual Content--Moderate
Series: Beyond Doubt
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 3346     Read Count: 1199
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Published: November 12, 2008     Updated: November 12, 2008


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 12, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Cultural Differences

LOL I just found this some days ago and couldn't seem to unlatch it from my brain... Wicked! :) This is the first time I could love story with a slash theme in it. :P You did a great job here, although I admit that I didn't know it was to be a slahs-pairing when I firstly read it. LOL

 

I love the humor present in every paragraph.... except the second half, of course. The Maia was so amusingly indifferent and the young king was quite sarcastic with sharp wit to boot. *grin* They made a perfect blend between two extreme points.  Oh, I never thought our Maia here like this, but this was quite a refreshing novelty - to me - to see. Perhaps that was what firstly attracted me to this... Hmm.

 

"I never intended anything more than a very brief kiss, no idea what happened
there. Every so often I get the urge to send them off on a picnic or something but so far I've resisted." Aww! Why not? *grin* Do it, please? :big eyes: Haha! Never thought I would beg for a slashy story... but now I do, anyway. That's heartfelt! I want to see how far things would go... Heheheh. A bit of naughty thought there. :P Anyway, thanks for writing this (although I seem to have come too late to greet it first hand) and posting it here!

 

- Rey



Author's Response:
Hi Rey :)

So sorry I took this long, I didn't get a comment notification.   

If I found a story featuring Gil-galad and Eonwë, I'd not expect slash either, lol. It was a dare originally - I gave Eonwë a small part in a longer work where he was horribly annoying, and was later challenged by my regular beta to write him with Gil. I wasn't even sure about the kiss when I started, but Gil apparently had other plans, lol. 

I have an idea this is the biggest compliment I've been paid - someone who doesn't usually love slash asking me to write a sequel to this fic, lol. I'm delighted you liked it so much, of course, and if anything could make me revisit the picnic idea, this is surely it *g*. Thanks a million for the lovely review, dear. I'll see if the boys will cooperate.

Kei/

Chosen by pandemonium_213

Rated: Teens | [Comments - 13]
Summary:

When the Voice of the One names the ruler of the Guardians of Arda, the decision results in dismay and discord by another who believes he should have been chosen. A re-interpretation of the Ainulindalë myth.

MEFA 2009: First Place - Races: Other Beings: General 


Characters: Ainur, Melkor
Challenges: None
Genres: General
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 654     Read Count: 1290
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Published: December 01, 2008     Updated: December 01, 2008


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chosen

A small but great piece of work! You certainly researched wide and deep for this one-shot, and I appreciate your effort sincerely. Some terms in this piece were confusing to me, and one or two of them were not explained in the end notes, but that did not deter me from reading on and thinking that it was a great work.

 

Why were Tulkas and Nessa not included in the thirteen, though? And, seen from the descriptions in the Silmarillion (yes, I have only read it and not its suplement ones, shamefully), there were other Ainur who did not go into the universe after its forming, although they had lesser power than most of the Valar... Why were they not included here?

 

Melkor seemed so innocent and benign here, unlike the depiction in the Silmarillion. I like it. You provided an ample reason of your own why he became evil, unlike what I perceived in the Silmarillion. Good job!

 

By the way, I agree with you on the Maiar being the servants of the Valar, but to me they were of the same race, or at least quite similar (like Men and hobbits) with the latter. I took the idea from the Silmarillion too. (LOL Just thinking to share something...)

 



Author's Response:

Thanks very much for reading and for your kind words, wind rider, and welcome to the SWG!

I'm curious as to which terms you found confusing.  In the end notes, I have referenced and defined Tolkien's invented (non-English) words, as he set them out in The Notion Club Papers.  Perhaps I missed something?

With regard to the other Ainur, again I have drawn inspiration from The History of Middle-earth (HoMe) in which JRRT wrote this about the Ainur who did not enter Arda (= the Solar System as JRRT explicitly stated) in Myths Transformed:

"Others there were, countless to our thought though known each and numbered in the mind of Ilúvatar, whose labour lay elsewhere and in other regions and histories of the Great Tale, amid stars remote and worlds beyond the reach of the furthest thought. But of these others, we know nothing and cannot know, though the Valar of Arda, maybe, remember them all."

So, with reference to JRRT's essays and comments in "Myths Transformed" (HoMe X, Morgoth's Ring), there were other Ainur who entered the universe (Eä) after its forming but"regions" (worlds) other than Arda , and whether they have greater or lesser powers than the Ainur of Arda is not clear. 

In "Chosen," the universe (Eä) already exists and its origins are a mystery. The Ainur in this fic are in the process of being "assigned," if you will, to Imbar (Earth) in Arda which has brought forth sentient life, a process that Melkor has observed as something like a "scout" and has thus become possessive of Imbar.  Because Tulkas entered the Kingdom of Arda last, I have not included him (or Nessa, one of the more minor Valar) in this fic although they easily could be there listening to the verdict, I suppose.

In The Silmarillion, the Maiar (the Valar's servants) are said to be of the same race but of a "lesser order" than the Valar.  I have taken that (and Tolkein's penchant for hierarchical structures) and spun it around with another interpretation of what that might mean.  As noted in the foreward/author's notes, the Ainulindalë is a creation myth, and thus prone to fluid interpretation (including yours and mine) as is much of Tolkein's mythopoeic world. 

 

 

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chosen

Thanks. :) I do love this site and have been meaning to join for a long time. Hopefully no one would laugh at my limited notion of Tolkien's early mithologies.

 

I can't search for the words now, but one of them, I remember, began with m then a-acute... something like that. :- Well, regardless.

 

LOL Yes, Tolkien's works leave much for interpretation and gap-fillers. That is why I love them so much, although those points can be annoying at times too. By the way, I'm glad - and relieved, truthfully - that you liked my review. That given my knowledge and discussion arts...

Sporting Woods by IgnobleBard

Rated: Teens | [Comments - 8]
Summary: Namo takes a stroll through Lórien.
Characters: Mandos
Challenges: B2MeM 2009
Genres: Humor
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 531     Read Count: 956
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Published: March 16, 2009     Updated: March 16, 2009


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 24, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Ahahahahaha! Naughty trees and fountain! Hmm. But fountain? Could it be Ulmo playing a trick on his little brother? LOL A good light piece! The trees reminded me of the Ents, by the way. The mental picture I got from the scene where they dipped their roots into the water made me laugh out loud!

 

I never saw the Lord of Mandos as... what the trees and the fountain described him to be. LOL It was refreshing! Although It made me roll my eyes too. I was surprised when you described Irmo as having woods too, not only gardens, but that is beside the point.

 

 

What did you mean with the dining room, though? I don't understand...



Author's Response:

LOL I never thought about Ulmo playing a trick. That would be funny.

"What did you mean with the dining room, though? I don't understand..."

Namo is going to make the trees into a table and chairs for his wife's dining room because of they insulted him.

Thanks for your comments, wind rider. I'm glad you enjoyed this.

Uinen’s Revenge by oshun

Rated: General | [Comments - 5]
Summary:


Back to Middle-earth Month Challenge, Day 21 – The Prompt: Describe a big storm . . . place it in Tolkien's world. A fixed-length ficlet of 125 words (counted by MS Word). “But Uinen wept for the mariners of the Teleri; and the sea rose in wrath against the slayers, so that many of the ships were wrecked and those in them drowned.” (The Silmarillion, “The Flight of the Noldor.”)

 


Characters: Fëanor, Maedhros, Uinen
Challenges: B2MeM 2009
Genres: Adventure, Drama
Warnings: None
Series: Maitimo and Findekáno
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 119     Read Count: 901
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Published: March 21, 2009     Updated: March 21, 2009


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Uinen’s Revenge

The piece was small but nicely written. However, I did not see Uinen's direct interaction with the characters here... Why did you put her name in the character list? I understand if that was the title, though.

 

LOL I have to refrain myself from going nitpicky... Hmm.

 

I love the first paragraph. I live in an archipelago country and love stories about the sea, however horrifying it is (okay, not so, but anyway). The word choice there was beautiful, and the personification of the ship made the picture look more vivid and the readers more immersed in the part - the predicament of the passangers aboard the stormy sea. Good job!



Author's Response:

Thanks for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed it! Great name--wind rider.

I don't know why I checked Unien in the character list! I added and took the name away several times--couldn't make up by mind. I guess because Unien was the actor in the sense of causing the storm finally made me leave it. Sorry if it misled you!

Thanks again!

Defiance by Marta

Rated: General | [Comments - 3]
Summary: Of all the Valar, Ulmo arguably knew the Numenoreans best and it was his waves that were used in their destruction. What must he have thought about the Akallabeth?
Characters: Ulmo
Challenges: None
Genres: Drama, Fixed-length Ficlet
Warnings: Mature Themes
Series: None
Chapters: 1 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 313     Read Count: 474
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Published: May 07, 2009     Updated: May 07, 2009


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: June 22, 2009
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

I love the last paragraph. It was a good ending and a great way to wrap the piece up and tie it neatly. Ulmo's defiance was shown most clearly there, although the theme ran in every paragraph and thought he mulled about (ant that is the aspect of this piece that I admire sincerely). Here you managed to portray his personality quite well also, albeit in such a small place (I think I will never be able to do that. LOL). The part that impressed me the most was when he thought about the stones and animal life in the island that would be drowned together with the Men and the island itself... It shows how he did not pay attention to just a matter - that was the rebellion of the Numenorian Men - but much more... The only thing that a bit unsettled me here is that you seemed to portray Eru as a being with narrower mind than Ulmo, as though He had not pondered about every thing and every angle of the matter before pronouncing the doom upon the island; as though in a way He was evil. *shrug* That was just fine, though, and once again, great job for this. :)

 

Character of the Month Biographies by Dawn Felagund

Rated: General | [Comments - 8]
Summary:

Each month, we spotlight a new character, with a biography posted in the monthly newsletter and the Reference Library Periodicals section. Please view the Table of Contents for the complete list of biographies.


Characters: Mahtan, Mandos, Pengolodh, Tulkas, Vairë, Vána
Challenges: None
Genres: Non-fiction/Essay
Warnings: None
Series: Reference Library: Periodicals
Chapters: 7 Table of Contents
Completed: No
Word count: 25     Read Count: 4815
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Published: February 01, 2009     Updated: October 11, 2015


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: February 22, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Námo

LOL I love your cheeky tone in this essay. That made the atmosphere less forbidding. :D ;) I did not browse through all the list of references you used for this essay... but I had a nagging feeling that it could be expanded. *hands up* Well, not by me; I just wanted to say that I spied some other things about the Lord of Mandos from many discussions and some other references, from Tolkien's earlier writings like HoMe. I thought I might get some confirmation here... Not to mean to be ungrateful or rude, though. :- I hope this essay will be updated someday with some other sources from canon...

 

- Rey



Author's Response:

Rey, your observations are correct. :) I did not use any sources outside of the Silm for this piece; part of it, honestly, was time constraints, since this essay was one I did with less than a day\'s notice due to our scheduled writer having a family emergency. Part of it, too, is practicality: You correctly note that there is a lot in the supplementary sources about Namo. Oshun (our main biographer) and I discussed at the time that I did this that a follow-up essay about the evolution of Namo\'s character through Tolkien\'s writings would be an interesting topic, though it will probably go through the regular References section and not the newsletter. It is certainly one that I hope to pick up someday (grad school right now makes any non-fiction writing impossible--unless it\'s to be graded, lol! :); Namo is one of the most intriguing characters, in my opinion, and one who has seen a wealth of interesting interpretations in fanfic. Thank you for reading and taking the time to leave a comment! :)

The Silmarillion Gospel by Araloth the Random

Rated: Teens | [Comments - 38]
Summary:

What happens when a group of clueless fangirls try to "translate" The Silmarillion into Biblical English? Utter chaos, of course!

Nominated for MEFA 2010, with many thanks to elfscribe!


Characters: Dwarves, Elves, Maiar, Sons of Fëanor, Valar
Challenges: None
Genres: Humor
Warnings: Expletive Language, Sexual Content--Mild
Series: None
Chapters: 5 Table of Contents
Completed: No
Word count: 4261     Read Count: 5518
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Published: December 22, 2009     Updated: July 24, 2010


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Murder on the High Cs

This is the second time I read this chapter and you still managed to make me laugh uproariously! (I am AiedailWing in FFN. ;)) Oh my. Laugh-triggers in every paragraph!

 

I didn't tell you which I loved the most in this when I reviewed this story in FFN, did I? Well, it's got to be rectified. *grin* I love the sentence about the Void up there, and Melkor's seeking the Imperishable Flame in it. (Of course! A void is a void is a void, so nothing's in there!) And the latter is why I love this story aside from the great humor: You get one tickling and lasting stuff when you combine humor and - cheeky - logic!

 

Speaking about your end notes, though... Was there someone wanting you to remove this story from anywhere?

 

And congrats for the two "The Splutter" awards! I'll add the third... ;)

 

- Rey



Author's Response:

Hi AiedailWing! =D *waves*

Thank you - I'm flattered! Melkor and the Void and all that just sorta jumped at me while I began parodying The Silm. Melkor's a silly one, looking around for something in a place that is actually named for its nothingness. :P

Not this particular story. I have had a few people get a little miffed at me through PMs on FFN for writing in a Biblical style. They obviously missed the fact that I was parodying fandom and not the Bible, and also the fact that I'm Catholic.

Thanks! =D

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 2: The Good, The Bad and The Ugly

Love the bird-brained Manwë! Haha. And plot bunnies are hopping around here... Sky resort in Oiolossë!

 

And the second-to-last sentence was so serious and so... cool. Except that it was ruined a second later by "Well, sort of." ROTFL Great!

 

And anger management indeed! Never thought Tulkas needs one, though, since he always laughs. *grin* But Oromë... Hahaha.

 

And your cheeky logic here continues! - I love it so, so much. What impressed me was when you talked about Uinen... I never thought about nasty tangles! Haha.

 

And again, this was the second time I read... but you still quite managed to make me laugh uproariously. (I did laugh the hardest at some parts, although I forget the details now... Bleh.)

 

Comes the question, though: How would you create the parody for the later chapters, where it's all doom and gloom? Oh, and does the story in this site have the same number of chapters as the one in FFN? (Don't want to miss more, when I'm reviewing on the MEFA's. ;))

 

- Rey

 

PS: Hey. Not that spot-on on Nienna... I think. I don't think she condones cursing, like her brother does. *grin* You could comment on her always-crying, though, and that would make it more spot-on and hilarious. :) Just a suggestion...



Author's Response:

LOL! I can see it now! :P

That's...a habit of mine, actually, when I'm writing parodies. How I love juxtaposition. ;)

Ah, Tulkas. He's just an all-round nut, I think. I like making the Valar quirky and crazy!

I actually don't know the answer to that question. I'm starting to wonder whether I'll ever get this finished, not only because of RL but because the muse isn't co-operating at all. How I'll manage to make light of oaths, incest, messy deaths, etc. I don't know. It's been troubling me for a while, ever since I realised that there are quite a few kinslayings and things that will be difficult to parody...

And thanks for your suggestion.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 3: Let's Start At The Very Beginning

Electricity and the Lamps! Hahahahahaha! I never thought of that!

 

And of course, those pretty and revered have many, many names... *grin* (It's one of the things I forgot to comment on the previous chapter. Long indeed is Varda's name! And Yavanna has shorter one... Good - cheeky but spot-on - point!) You could comment on why the Gold Tree has more names, though, in the chapter. That would create even more humor there. And who knows? - You might get people to think about what they haven't thought before. (Argh. Electricity indeed! Haha.)

 

And I nearly fell off the bed (I'm perching on it while reading) imagining Tulkas chasing Melkor... ROTFL There is indeed one Melkor fears, then (aside from Ulmo?): Tulkas' laughter. And the scene was hilarious throughout! Haha. Melkor's hiding in Utumno... You know, I pictured a naughty little toddler diving into a tunnel of pillows and boulsters when I read that particular paragraph about Melkor's running away to safety. Those words triggered that in me! Dunno why...

 

Your foreshadowing was good. It builds unity for the separate chapters, and it shows how serious you are about this parody. (Some people just do it crappily to satisfy the surface need of laughter... This is the first story I totally love out of all the parodies on the same subject that I have read.)

 

I was a little bit surprised, I admit, when you gave a different opening to this chapter. But it did give a good background for this rewritten 'book of lores'! Poor, poor Elrond... *grin* And naughty fangirls indeed! (Hmm. I wonder if I am one of those naughty girls... :D)

 

- Rey

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 4: In Which Aule Stuffs Things Up

"miruvodka™!" Oh my - Ara, you're coining yet a new name!!! *huggle* You did it to one of the tokens, I noticed. *grin hugely* And now you did it here... Might I borrow it, though? I'd credit you, of course.

 

Here, again, you spanned your writing to touching even LotR... Great. :) And haha - the Smith prancing around in happiness? Awwh... Never thought of that! And now I may be ruining my eating appetite... LOL

 

And the society... ROTFL You blend modern terms/words with these medieval things quite perfectly! (Have I told you that? If not, sorry. *grin*)

 

Now that I am restarting reading, I cannot stop... Update soon, please! (But I do know that uni is demanding... Teaching is just as demanding, I just found out, so I can sympathise with you here. :)) Just one more chapter left... :'(

 

- Rey



Author's Response:

Miruvodka™ was an invention for a...er, 'epic' Mary Sue parody I wrote for LotR and which I finished at the beginning of this year. I didn't know one of the names I'd invented was on a tokens...and yes, you can borrow it! :) Just remember to credit - I'm very fussy with that. :P

I'll try to update soon, but like you've said, uni's demanding. I haven't written any fanfiction for a while because of RL demands.

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 5: The Elves Goeth Marching One By One

Hey - you put that name from the token here! ROTFL and many, many more hilarious names... A brillian brain you have there! (No, no, not bird-brain. *grin* ;))

 

This chapter is tickling in their own way. And it's a hard job to point which really tickles me, because everything there tickles me... You are quite cheeky! :D I'm quite glad that your cheekiness persists till now, where the humor is harder to get from the boring situations. I just hope you will manage just wonderfully when it's all about doom and gloom. (Haha! Oh that one pronouncement... That one was hilarious! *groan* Now I do get a stomachache from laughing too hard and too long. :P)

 

What about shady deals and weed, though? And what about terror and whips of flame and dodgy conotations? Sorry if I'm being slow here, but I really don't get what they were really about.

 

Please update soon! And a definite "The Splutter" for you. *grin* ;) Hopefully I can review this story in the MEFA's soon too... But I can't promise you that.

 

Thank you very much for the hilarious rewrite of The Silmarillion. I need the laugh. :) - And oh, good luck with uni. :)

 

- Rey



Author's Response:

Was that the 'Iluvdiacritics' one? Actually, I think someone liked the name from the story and then named a token after it. Thank you to whoever that was! =D Well, as I said, I'm not sure how I'll go with the doom and gloom bits but we'll cross that bridge when we come to it. :)

"What about shady deals and weed, though? And what about terror and whips of flame and dodgy conotations? Sorry if I'm being slow here, but I really don't get what they were really about."

That's okay. Some of the things I put in there were references to drugs and such.

And thank *you* for all your reviews! Good luck with your teaching. :)

- Ara

Mahtan's Apprentice by WendWriter

Rated: Teens | [Comments - 5]
Summary:

Nerdanel is in love with a Noldor prince with a reputation for being sullen at best, difficult at worst. Whatever does she see in him? And how will Mahtan get along with him?


Characters: Aulë, Elves, Estë, Fëanor, Fingolfin, Finwë, Indis, Mahtan, Mandos, Manwë, Melkor, Míriel Serindë, Nerdanel, Nienna, Original Character(s), Sons of Fëanor, Vairë, Valar
Challenges: None
Genres: Drama, Horror
Warnings: Character Death, Mature Themes
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: No
Word count: 5613     Read Count: 4323
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Published: January 13, 2010     Updated: February 02, 2010


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: January 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: First Impressions

Oh. How did you know I often use the pen name "wind rider" in most places? I think the Yahoo Group does not display that? :uncertain: Anyway...

 

The piece was nice. I wish you had connected Feanaro's statement with the paragraph in which he routed in the box, though. *shrug* That looked less more coherent.

 

LOL You said first that his eyes were grey, then you described (near the end) that the eyes were deep sapphire... I thought you might want to know this. The piece was otherwise very neat and enjoyable, though, and I found myself wanting for more! *grin* It showed great promise, and now that I am the reader, I found the feeling reaffirmed. Hopefully you will update soon. Love Feanaro and Mahtan. Wish you put more of Nerdanel here...

 

 

- Rey



Author's Response:

 

Thanks! I did some research on Google, then double-checked. 

I didn't connect Feanaro's "Let me see the jewels" with rooting in the box because that action took place while Nerdanel was speaking. He said "Let me see the jewels," then Nerdanel spoke while he walked over and began to poke about in there. I did it that way for fluidity. People don't tend to stop what they're doing to listen to other people speaking when they're not interested in what they have to say, or the conversation is not addressed to them. People who are very familiar with each other tend to do that. Strangers or those who tend to be more formal with each other would wait for the speaking to stop before acting. The point is, Feanoaro is accustomed to behaving like that and getting away with it. He hasn't been properly socialized, due to the fact that he detests his half-brothers and his father indulges him, so he's like that all the time.

Virtuella told me to trust the readers to make those connections for themselves, so I didn't explain this.

Thanks for the nitpick - that's the kind of thing I need you for!

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: January 14, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: First Impressions

(Heheh. It is me again...)

 

*squirm* Umh... Glad that someone does not view my nitpickiness as a bother... at least not much. LOL

 

*cough* All right. Back to my intention of replying here... To me, when reading, it appeared as though Feanaro did that after Nerdanel spoke. You should have added "Meanwhile" before "With..." then, if that is what you intended to do. So the readers would be well informed of what was happening but not in an overwhelming way. Virtuella's right, but readers can't draw conclutions without sufficient evidence too.

 

- Rey

 

PS: Huh. I hope I have not been too harsh, insistant or generally annoying... :uncertain:

 



Author's Response:

 

It's cool, you're not. I'm very tolerant of reviewers who point out stuff they don't like, however it comes across.

Tell you what, I'll leave it and see what the others say - not to disrespect you, but to find out if it really is a problem. If one more person says it, I'll make the change. It's just that, to me, it doesn't matter that much either way.

Copper and Flame by Araloth the Random

Rated: General | [Comments - 6]
Summary:

A sweet and light-hearted story in which a young Feanor discovers new feelings for the daughter of a craftsman. Slightly AU. Complete!


Characters: Fëanor, Finarfin, Fingolfin, Finwë, Indis, Mahtan, Nerdanel, Original Character(s)
Challenges: None
Genres: Humor, Romance
Warnings: None
Series: None
Chapters: 4 Table of Contents
Completed: Yes
Word count: 8782     Read Count: 5638
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Published: August 10, 2010     Updated: August 31, 2010


Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 18, 2010
Title: Chapter 1: Chapter 1

Beautiful. Sweet and light, indeed, but beautifully written. You had Fëanáro's characterisation there very well. And I wouldn't imagine Nerdanel as that bubbly, but she was also portrayed quite nicely. :) This was quite an enjoyable read so far, and promising...

 

Your description of Mahtan's eyes made me giggle too, you know. *grin* Wherever did you get the image?

 

And how Fëanáro was gradually smitten by Nerdanel was... just wow. LOL I'll never 'look at' her the same again! You didn't talk about any physical unloveliness directly, like other authors usually do, but you highlighted her features, and only in the last moment did you say that Fëanáro hadn't considered her beautiful before. So sweet! I love this approach on the beginning of the love between the two. - How old were they, though, by the way?

And now on to the next chapter! *grin*

- Rey



Author's Response:

Thank you! :) I decided to make my characters in this story a little different to the usual portrayals so I'm glad that came across!

I have no idea where my mind pulls those images from. I think my brain works very strangely.

I didn't have any specific age in mind, but I do know that Elves come of age at around fifty. Feanor and Nerdanel are young here, so I'd say they are either a little younger or a littler older than fifty. :)

Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: wind rider Signed
Date: September 19, 2010
Title: Chapter 2: Chapter 2

Haha. Fitting name. But wouldn't it be more fitting given to a dragon, though? It's too obvious, when put on a person's. Here in Indonesia, we do have names which mean "wealthy" or "wealth," but not "lover of wealth"... :-

 

But aside from that, it was a very good chapter. I got a little confused (and surprised) when you suddenly slipped in Nerdanel's point of view there, but otherwise it was good. (Could you please warn when you're adding a new point of view or more, though? And some separator... Just so that there's no reading hiccups. And sorry for criticising. I do love this story. It's not that far from canon, but it depicts canon well. (And I can imagine that Indis is actually doing her best to please him; only that what she deems best and what he does is... different. (To say the least! LOL) His one-sided enmity with her works quite well with canon, so I can't think why you label it as "slightly AU." *grin* And Indis' perceived annoying tones and behaviour just solidify the 'roundness' of his point of view...)

 

And you presented a case which might be true in that timeframe here very well. The execusion of the problem Nerdanel and Fëanáro were landing themselves into was flawless and quite enjoyable. :) And now I hunger for more! *grin*

 

- Rey

 

PS: Strange metal thing? I wonder what that is... It reminded me of Da Vinci's paintings. :) And by the way, you can't really shape a hot metal with your hands, you know... :-



Author's Response:

Ah...now, I wasn't aiming for 'realistic' when I wrote this! Autendil is meant to be exaggerated. I did that on purpose. :)

I do believe I had a separator in there but I copied it over from FFN and they deleted my asterisks, darnit. I labelled this as slightly AU because I think Nerdanel and Feanor were originally meant to meet when they were travelling but I decided to do it differently. So technically it's not quite canon, is it? :P

I didn't say that hot metal could be shaped with your hands - I said that it was taking a strange form underneath so-and-so's hands. I meant figuratively. :) Perhaps I could've made that clearer!