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This is such a tender moment - I don't see enough of Mahtan in fics, unless he is lurking menacingly behind Feanor. :D Lovely!

It smelled of rotting leaves and mushrooms.

It is such a wonderful smell, though!! This whole brief moment was beautiful <3

I liked that scene with Mahtan and Nerdanel a lot! (Is the idea that the Feanorian lamps are really Mahtan's, originally, or are these all just related types of Noldorin lamps?)

Thranduil's feelings about the tree and the spiderweb are moving and really come across to the reader.

All so good!  Melkor's contrition was definitely unexpected but such an interesting idea.  Poor Cirdan, I swear, the Valar are so maddening - you can ferry an island twice but three times is just too much!?  What!?  Oh yes, Idril!  Such foresight!  And Ecthelion *ow my heart*

Beautiful! <3

I'd like this lamp next to my bed too! I like that you brought in Aulë's thing about not being attached to his work and finding joy in giving.

I love spiders, and also find their webs so fascinating, so I'm delighted to find friendly and appreciated spiders in Mirkwood too!

Parma - oh I legit teared up.  What a beautiful gift, filling in just a little of so many holes left.

Quesse - and tears again!  Such beautiful, gentle musings.

Yanta - at last, someone who learns from others' mistakes!  *applauds*

North - no it's okay, I didn't need feels today or anything

Starlight - what a beautiful moment, though the pain is coming

Starlight Reversed - oof... yes... here it comes!

Gift - 'That ridiculous elf had paid attention.' -  LOL you are forgiven for hurting me first

Tongue - LOL

South - <3

Hook - He might well make Elves fear him, as well!!

Heart - hate it when organs begin to rebel.

Fate - oof again... I admit I am not always as forgiving of Namo as perhaps I ought to be.

Iron - oh! :'(  I love/hate how he has lost his love for the working of metal.  I love how our fics are practically mirrored here!