Sadly, I have always imagined it could have gone exactly like this. The horror of it! Anyway, really, really like this. I hope you do continue it. Very nicely expressed.

And, congrats, for writing and sharing it. It takes courage to take up writing fiction again if one has not done it for while.

So sad! And somehow frighteningly plausible. That passage is beautifully worded in the Silmarillion but...

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I'm so glad you decided to put this up! And I would be very happy to see it continued. Good horror is as thoughtprovoking as it is chilling, and this is perfect.:)

Congratulations on breaking your hiatus from creative writing with such a deliciously creepy little piece!  Very effective imagery as well as delving into each character's experience of bondage.  The closing paragraph is pitch perfect.

I'm thrilled with your concept, i.e., the Valar as a technologically advanced species (recall Clarke's Third Law) who are not, uh, necessarily benign.  There are a few of us out there, including myself, who have taken similar, but not identical, approaches.  Anyway, I'm keenly interested to see where you go with it.  This prologue has certainly piqued my interest!

As an aside, I highly recommend Dawn's Hastaina.

I'm glad to see you posted it, and even happier that it was so well-received here! (Not that I had much of a doubt, but this truly should get all the reviews, because, well, ilyë felmi, ilyë felmi!)

Whoa, that was amazing! So vivid... and such an interesting idea, too. I loved that last paragraph especially. I hope you keep writing, because this is incredible :D