Thank you! I wasn't sure how effective the stream-of-conscious thoughts as written were, but I'm glad it worked for you as the reader. The contrast between epic battle in the background to the intimacy of Thingol holding Beren and how his own thoughts alternate between frantic and frozen was something I knew how it'd be filmed, but to put into prose is a whole other kettle of fish.

There's only one line about Elmo from canon - the footnote explaining that he's Elu and Olwë's younger brother, father of Galadhon who was father of Gaalthil and Celeborn. Despite that slim reed, I must admit he is my favorite minor elf character (just off the sheer fun of telling someone there's a Tolkien elf named Elmo, plus the possibilities of stories about teh Eglath and Sindar he provides). Huan as a Maia of Oromë is one of those things that I'm not sure has a quote anywhere in HoME, but seems so obviously implied by canon that I can't imagine otherwise.

That Beren has a couple similarities to Thingol tends to amuse me- and that Thingol does this 180 in attitude towards his son-in-law I always found moving. Their mutual connection to Finrod was there, but only after hindsight after coming up with my possible explanation for Elmo's death did I realise there was a story there about parallels.