Grey Ships Sailing by Lferion
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Fanwork Notes
Written for the Silmarillion Writer's Guild March challenge "It Comes in Threes" using the prompts: Isildur's Ships & layers of air (Vista, Ilmen, Vaiya).
The form is a Triolet.
Posted on AO3 here.
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Summary:
Grey ships depart Mithlond
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Genre: Experimental, Fixed-Length Ficlet, Poetry
Challenges: It Comes in Threes
Rating: General
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Chapters: 1 Word Count: 51 Posted on Updated on This fanwork is complete.
Grey Ships Sailing
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Grey ships sailing a cold grey sky
To Westernesse, far Elvenhome
Through white wave-foam where white gulls cry
Grey ships sailing a cold grey sky
The Straight Road calls, O homeward fly
By Moon and Sun, by starry dome
Grey ships sailing a cold grey sky
To Westernesse, far Elvenhome
That is very incantatory; it…
That is very incantatory; it makes me feel those ships, almost, rather than envision them...
Very beautiful!
Very beautiful!
Evocative, and the rhythm is…
Evocative, and the rhythm is lovely.
I like the way you blend the prompts.
That image of the ships…
That image of the ships caught in the grey sky gives me shivers. How much more powerful will the reveal be when the curtain rolls back on that far green country? This is lovely.
This is lovely!
This is lovely!
lovely
The repetitive nature of the triolet really supports the theme -- I can hear the waves and the water in the background here. Well done.