Comments on A Bundle of Joy

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Having commented on AO3, I realised that I forgot to say that the descriptions of Haleth entering Thargelion, her hungry horse, and how she was so formally passed through guards and steward before Caranthir arrives, were great worldbuilding in such a short piece. 

And Erestor being the son of Caranthir and Haleth is a favourite trope. 💖