Comments on One Flesh, One Soul. Part I

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I read this story for the first time last year and really loved it! Didn’t have an account at the time so couldn’t leave a comment but am so happy to see it being reposted :)

I find the writing beautiful, the characterizations insightful, and your storytelling is addictive. Rereading this has been so enjoyable, super excited for the rest to be reposted <3