Oh, well done! Very atmospheric. You made me instantly care about the characters and sad to think that they were lost at sea.

An interesting start--Abaron makes a good POV figure, although I almost wonder why Amandil chose to take him along on a venture like this. Not that the other options might not have turned out as dangerous!

It seems they might be about to meet Maiar, going by the character list?

I'm very much enjoying this--a very fascinating look at both the later Numenoreans as well as the Valinor & the Valar in the late Second Age. I always wondered if Amandil got lost on one of the Enchanted Isles or just died along the way, but I like your take very much and am very curious about how the journey of Amandil and his companions will progress from here.

What a wonderful story. Truly I held my breath through the trial and to the doom.  Between the shock and box of kleenex, it took me awhile to come to terms with it.  You are a very gifted writer.  I expect to see more of your stories.  

Respectfully