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Very sad, but bittersweet. I like the last four lines very much. I also in my Fingon/Maedhros come back again and again, that under other circumstances he would have made a very good king and that Fingon, in fact, believes that strongly and mourns it along with other things Maedhros lost.

Thanks, Oshun!  I actually thought those last four lines were kind of cheesy, but I couldn’t think of another way to do it.  I agree that, if the circumstances had been right, Maedhros probably would have been an excellent king (and as all I seem to write lately are AUs, I may have to explore that idea further someday).  I’m very grateful that you reviewed this story (again!) – it’s nice to get feedback from someone who seems to be as passionate about Maedhros as I am.  :D

Your story most certainly belongs to that kind of fiction that always leaves me awed. And it's not only for the fact that I do have a soft spot for Maedhros. (I believe he's one of the most fascinating characters -- and I agree that he would have been a great king.) My hat's off to you for giving us a great, truly moving portrayal of Fingon.

Heart-breaking, sad, and wonderfully written story, and I marvel at its poetic style.

Great stuff! Thank you so much for sharing.

All the best,

Binka 



Your writing is beautiful and distinctive. Part of the reason I love this fic is the way you phrase sentences, for example:

Two for his lover’s lifeless eyes, three as they open against all odds, the color of dust or stormy skies.

I don't know quite why I liked that sentence - it just stuck in my mind for some reason.

The way Fingon loves Maedhros despite his flaws/maiming is very touching, and (I think) very characteristic (of Fingon, that is).

–Russandol? – questions Maglor. The inquiry seems almost a command, or desperate plea.

My heart went out to Maglor on reading that sentence - you conveyed his desperation very well.

This fic is (deservedly) in my favourites!

(Sorry if this review was all over the place, btw.)

Mistrali :)



Thanks, I’m thrilled to be on your favorites. :)

I played around a lot with phrasing and word-flow in this story, so I am glad to hear that it worked out.  Characterizing in such a short piece can really be a challenge (especially for minor characters like Maglor), as you have to convey so much with so few words... so I’m glad you think I did well with that.  Thank you so much for reviewing; there is nothing I love more than knowing that a writer who I respect has enjoyed my work.

What a subtle, sad, and yet sweet AU ficlet!  Maedhros may have lost his beauty and his mental stability (although the latter is debatable), but he's kept something far more precious - Fingon's love. The real orcs are those who don't understand the healing power to be found in love.