Comments on Blasphemy

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I'm glad I get to be the first to review.  You already know how crazy I am about Maitimo.  It's easy to feel the same way about Fingon.  Reading about them in a garden somehow reminds me of "The Scented Pleasure Garden" especially when you mentioned the blue flowers for Fingon and that he feels that red flowers would suit Maitimo. 

But all kidding aside, I enjoyed reading the story because of the of what lies beneath:  of innocent, golden times shadowed with the premonition of darker future events.   Thanks for sharing this.

My favorite line is Nelyo's:  "Do you ever think that maybe we're just like that flower...that maybe, maybe we weren't meant to stay rooted forever."



Oh, god, it was so hard not to think of your fic when I was writing this!  I was trying to be serious, and you made it very difficult. :p  I have not been into early Valinor fic much lately, I don’t know why.  (Maybe it’s just too uplifting for me...?)  But I have to admit, it was such a relief to take a break from “Just One Victory” and write something even halfway uplifting and innocent, even if I couldn’t resist a bit of foreshadowing.  And I’m very glad that you enjoyed it.  Thanks for reviewing!

I'm a sucker for visual imagery, so your beautiful descriptions of light and colour really stayed with me.

Nice symbolism, too, with the red and blue for Maedhros and Fingon respectively. Out of curiosity, do the white flowers represent anyone in particular, or are they just symbolic of fragility?

Also, well done with the foreshadowing!

Nelyo once said that I would make a good king.

Small sentences like that, sprinkled throughout - very effective. Also, the concept of blasphemy was - not chilling, exactly, but premonitory (is that even a word?).

Mistrali

P.S. I've been listening too much in English class lol.



Thanks for taking the time to review.  I tried to keep symbolism to a minimum here (well, considering that the entire story was built around it, anyway); I am not a symbolism person at all, so the white flowers can mean whatever you’d like.  Really, I wrote most of this story while sitting in a garden, and there literally were white and blue flowers all over the place, but no red.  I guess that just got me thinking.  And I can never resist foreshadowing; it’s all over the place in almost all of my stories.

p.s. Don’t pay too much attention in English class – they’ll destroy your appreciation of all things literary, and they never know what they’re talking about anyway. :p

This is a lovely piece- loads of wonderful undercurrents and oblique references as well as that sort of excitment that comes from discovering love - and I love the rather more adult and knowing Nelyo. Just thoroughly enjoying reading your work right now.