I loved the moment you chose to portray, charged with expectation and such significance. You showed what a hard decision it was for Inziladun, and the courage and strength of will it must have taken. It was a very interesting look into a very momentous occasion. Thanks!

Poor Inziladun; he and Miriel deserved so much better from history.  At least Inziladun created an environment where the Faithful could prosper. 

Excellent use of Adunaic.  It is nice to see Inziladun so strong and hopeful at the beginning of his reign...

I especially liked your having Gimilkhad call Palantir the Valar's fool. It reminds me of some things I read in the bible about being a fool for God and his actions do fit that rather well. However, I doubt Gimilkhad meant it as a compliment...

A good reconstruction of an important, although ultimately futile, moment in the history of Numenor.  It must have been a difficult road for Tar-Palantir to take and that comes over well here.

Copy of my MEFA review:

This is an interesting episode to pick. I am not well read in fiction about Numenor, but I believe when Tar-Palantir appears it is more often at the end of his life or even as a memory only, viewed from the perspective of the following reign. His relationship with his brother and father is certainly worth looking at, and it is interesting to get a glimpse of a few other members of the royal family such as his mother and his wife as well as his daughter, and of his relatives from Andunie. Tar-Palantir appears very determined and courageous in this story, if perhaps not entirely diplomatic - not that it is clear by any means whether diplomacy would have served him better under the circumstances he found himself in. His story is ultimately almost as sad as Amandil's. The use of Adunaic in this story and the way it is contrasted with Sindarin is in itself a well-thought-out feature, which clearly has taken a lot of work