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The thoughts of Finwë, who along with Ingwë and Elwë is roped to Nahar and Oromë on the way to Aman, are both practical and a little apprehensive. Typical Noldo, he brought the rope and food. Ingwë is already a dazzled Vanya. Elwë has doubts. Just perfect. 

Finwe's doubts and fears are so understandable, his memories of the Dark Rider so very vivid. We know that Orome means well, but he is right, who is to say this isn't a trap. And he thinks of Míriel who he left alone with their unborn child.

Oh this was lovely!  I like Finwë's uncertainty, Elwë's stubbornness, and I have occasionally mused on exactly how they came to Valinor - I like the idea that either Oromë was large enough to just carry them or that he was able to make himself larger for the journey.

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How interesting! Ingwë, looking ahead to the future, both the good and the bad. Finwë, practical, curious, and thinking about Miriel. And Elwë... Elwë loves nothing more than to prove a point. Yes, that checks out!

 

Beautifully written, and I loved the fantastic imagery in this story. You have captured their differences well. Poor Finwë doesn't yet know what the future will bring... that the dark being he was so scared of will become his bane.