Comments on The Stars of Home

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Your original characters are always so well drawn and your world building is fabulous!

I felt sorry for him, even though he doesn't come over as a vary nice person. His visceral terror at expecting a painful death really leapt off the page!

Hi Fredbassett! 

Thanks for letting me know that you're reading and enjoying, that means a lot to me. And of course thanks for those kind words about our villain. I'm glad to hear that his panic gets across. He's made a bad decision though.... you'll see!