Comments on A falling star

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this is so imaginative and charming, I could see it illustrated like a picture book!  This image especially: "The star hung from the firmament like a great indolent spider, swaying under the push of the celestial winds, a single thread of light holding it suspended in its place."  love the humor and sort of old-fashioned tone of it all.  and Elrond at the end!!! 🥹

Delightful! Such a warm relationship between Varda and Earendil! And Earendil and Elwing are such a team!

There is a fairy-tale feel to some of this, with neat descriptions and twists. The end is lovely.