Jail-Crow by lonelyvisitor  

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Fanwork Notes

This is my conception of an excerpt from the Noldolantë of Maglor, done (sort of) in the style of a free-translated Homeric epic, though without any proper meter. It features Fëanáro and Melkor at the gate of Formenos. From Maglor's point of view, in address to his brothers, though marginally.  

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Summary:

Fëanor tells Melkor to get off his lawn. An imagined passage from the Noldolantë of Maglor.

Major Characters: Fëanor, Maglor, Melkor

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Genre: Experimental, General, Poetry

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Rating: Teens

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Chapters: 1 Word Count: 1, 351
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Chapter 1

This is my conception of an excerpt from the Noldolantë of Maglor, done (sort of) in the style of a free-translated Homeric epic, though without any proper meter. It features Fëanáro and Melkor at the gate of Formenos. From Maglor's point of view, though marginally.  

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This is beautiful! And I quite like that it's "without any proper meter"; the style gives me the sense of reading a poem that's been translated into English from an ancient language, which fits very nicely with the subject matter.

I particularly enjoyed this line: "and arose in wrath, so awfully the enemy himself now"

Perhaps I'm reading too much into it, but I really love how in the context of the whole poem, this line is helping to tell about Fëanor seeing through Morgoth's lie- but even as he does so, I feel like the word choice here calls forward really nicely to his later actions.

"Arose in wrath" seems to me to echo the meaning of Melkor, "He who arises in Might"; so even as Fëanor condemns Morgoth, he is in some sense doing what Morgoth does, and thereby becoming "the enemy himself now".

I just thought it was really cool how that line fits smoothly and logically with what's happening within the story of the poem, but when it's read as its own entity it can be taken as some really clever foreshadowing!