An interesting glimpse into Gil-galad's mind!

(There are people who you can ask to vet your Quenya for you, although I'm not one of them.  Have you tried asking in one of those SOWD motivational posts?)

This reminds me of Dwimordene's thoughts on Nessa--she also thought Nessa was an underrated Valie, although she interpreted the significance of the Dance a bit differently.

Yes, joy is not for the faint-hearted...

I hope your nervousness has abated somewhat, because this is excellent! I love the strong voice you're using for Gil-galad while still acknowledging the uncertainty in his choice (I for one wouldn't call it entirely selfish, and you've made him very sympathetic in wanting that choice to begin with), and the idea of the Noldor still labouring under the Doom of Mandos seems to fit in well with the way we know the story went - it's bitter, but I love this observation too, and the way this twists the poem (it does!) is wonderful. Well done, and (if a review is the right place to say this), welcome to the fandom. I hope you found a comfy spot. :)

Another wonderful ficlet with a bitter insight - I never believed the idea that not all of the Valar had a purpose (especially the minor women like Vána or Nessa), and this hammers home that they all had important (and sometimes strenuous) work, even though it may not be entirely appreciated.

What a wrenching end to a wrenching scene!

You describe her claustrophobia and frustration very vividly!

(small nit-picks:  "week" for "weak";  "because at actions" for "at her actions"?)

I really like this! Great character sketch.