Comments on Watching the Dance

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<3 This little story. I love Túrin. What happened to him was 50% bad luck (probably caused by Morgoth) and 50% spectacularly bad decisions (on his part and also his family's and the people near him).  I feel sorry for the guy.

Anyway, I liked this glimpse of his youth: the foreshadowing of his death, alone in the forest, and the way he calmed after the storm. He's very much like a storm himself... one very prone to killing people, unfortunately. 

 



It's taken me ages to try and come up with a good review for this, hence the belated reaction. You probably won't be surprised to hear that I loved this - the hints at the culture of perception of the Valar by the Sindar, Nellas' sheer joy and optimism (which is a) adorable, and b) quite enviable), the fact that you picked these two characters in the first place --- three leaves! --- and the author's notes, which were just as wonderful as the story.

And this doesn't even cut close to what I want to say. Long story short, I don't deserve it. Thank you for writing it anyway. <3



Yay, you found it! I was worrying that I should've sent you a notice since I wasn't certain if you had time for the SWG at the moment.

I was hoping that you'd like it - writing those two certainly was a first. Nellas' character here has been largely formed by our discussion about who might make a good pb for Nellas and the brief mention of River Tam - except that (I thought) Nellas would be River but without the trauma (aside from general anxiety, I guess). Turns out River without the trauma is Luna Lovegood. ;)

Anyway, I'm glad you found and enjoyed this, which was after all the point. As for the deserving, that's the sneaky thing about gifts - the gifted doesn't get to decide that... ;)
*hugs*

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Hi Lyra! I just love stories where an author writes from a youngster's point of view - be they an elfling or a child of Man. Nellas was enchanting and doubtless much older than little Turin had imagined! ;-) Really nice demonstration of how a simple incident, faced with the help of a gentle guide, can go a long way in bolstering a child's confidence and preparing him to manage the greater challenges life will eventually throw at him. Thoroughly enjoyed the story and learned a lot myself! Thanks for sharing it with me!



Hi Elletheril! I always find it a bit difficult to write youngsters (I'm afraid of overdoing "childish" voices!), so I'm really happy that you liked this little story, especially if you're a fan of the genre. It certainly was fun to write Túrin in a (relatively) non-angsty situation! ;) Thank you for letting me know what you think!