It has an inevitable feel to it.  Fate hangs heavy over this whole story. 

This story makes me want to beat Manwe over the head with a club - how culd he not see what he was setting in motion here?  You do an excellent job of showing how more than just Feanor and Nerdanel's relationship is wrecked by the exile.

How sad, and how profound this is after Another Man's Song, which was so full of life and cheer and fevrour and passion. But already the seeds were sown even in AMS, so the bleakness and the low key writing style are perfectly matched to the subject. And I htink the 'ommission' point is beautifully made, first in the argument and then in the action. 

You set up this wonderfully doubting atmosphere full of tension and questions that contrasts so brilliantly with the domesticated and cheery ANC. Of course beneath all the humour lurks an awful lot of tension and the foreshadowing that you are so brillaint at- but here it is made rasl and all those tensions surface...or not. That is what makes this so compelling- that even in spite of the huge cost to them, they will go with him.

This last chapter broke my heart. To see the love that is there when is not enough anymore... You make it easy to be sympathetic towards Fëanor, but also Nerdanel,