Comments on Heat

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Urgh! Devastatingly bleak. (complementary)

(Also, that idea of irritatingly hot and humid conditions contrasting with Valinor's perfection sets the stage so marvellously.)

Thank you! Love that i got the bleakness across

I wrote the first draft during the summer heatwaves and that first paragraph just popped into my head when it was hot, humid (Ireland always is) and it prevented me from sleep.

I'm glad you enjoyed it! I'm glad to be able to write again.