So.  I am extraordinarily embarrassed that it has taken me so long to place an Official Review for The Swan's Song here on the SWG.  Because I see it on the LC and get in my compliments and suggestions there, I tend to forget that the polished chapter are here.  I'm also rather taken aback that the WIP has received no rreviews here up to this point, because IMO, it is a fine story with a carefully built secondary world and a well-drawn OFC.  Actually, a number of well-drawn OCs.  But it's Idhreniel who is the star:  counselor to Gil-galad and a student of starlore.  She's smart, subtle, and has a very authentic feel to her.  That is to say, she is easily envisioned as a character that could slip right into Tolkien canon.

The settings are described beautifully - not overdone at all and with attention to word choices so effective that the scenes in the story unfold cinematically.  Dialog's very appealing, too, and again, with an authentic feel so that one gets the impression of real people talking, not just characters viewed from 30,000 feet.

Of course, I'm a sucker for the science contained herein as well as the cultural differences between Sinda and Noldo, which is neatly explored!

Very well done, Kim, and I hope this story gets more attention!  It deserves it.

I've only just read the first chapter, I'm afraid. But you set the scene well, introduce likable characters--and Idhreniel is clearly a great storyteller! I hope to find time to catch up with this tale a bit more some time soon.