Interesting choice of style. A bit on the model of Christopher Logue's War Music, perhaps? Is it part of a longer project?

Great suff! I really enjoyed reading it!

I quite liked this.  It had something of an epic verse feel, and something of wry wit too with the insertion of modern-sounding terms ('tranoceanic passage').

Wow!  I loved this.  Particularly "A fine business model."  and "hobbyist jewelwers".  I've read Homer (a long time ago), but not the Noldolante yet.  It seems to be more gloom than slash...

This is beautiful! And I quite like that it's "without any proper meter"; the style gives me the sense of reading a poem that's been translated into English from an ancient language, which fits very nicely with the subject matter.

I particularly enjoyed this line: "and arose in wrath, so awfully the enemy himself now"

Perhaps I'm reading too much into it, but I really love how in the context of the whole poem, this line is helping to tell about Fëanor seeing through Morgoth's lie- but even as he does so, I feel like the word choice here calls forward really nicely to his later actions.

"Arose in wrath" seems to me to echo the meaning of Melkor, "He who arises in Might"; so even as Fëanor condemns Morgoth, he is in some sense doing what Morgoth does, and thereby becoming "the enemy himself now".

I just thought it was really cool how that line fits smoothly and logically with what's happening within the story of the poem, but when it's read as its own entity it can be taken as some really clever foreshadowing!

Oh my god, I LOVE everything about this! Instant favourite. <3