I've Hungered for Your Touch by oshun

Very nice! I like both that it keeps to canon - unfortunately, no happily ever after for this pair is just that - and that Caranthir gets to hear her side of it all these years later. I love how alive Haleth sounds, and how honest. (And I had a good giggle at the brandy incident. Well done working humor in as well!)

LOVING this to bits, from the first sentence to the last. I may come back with a more cohenerent comment later on, but I wanted to tell you that I adored this fic. Thank you so much!

I'm only on Chapter Two--this was my reward for a stint of planning--but I love this so far! I'm swooning over your Caranthir. Keeping company all these years with Caranthir fangirls has finally done me in, I fear! He's beautiful and gracious as you write him.

But Haleth! Haleth is absolutely perfect as the scrappy, youthful, cocksure woman raised among a fiercely independent people. She rings very, very true to me.

This is going to be a great reward for me for getting my work done. ^_^

I don't know how you manage to make me love the Feanorians so much but you always do. Here is Caranthir, who should be a dark, gloomy character, but you make him so vital and alive in all his fiercely intelligent awkwardness that I can't help adoring him. It's so great to see him through Haleth's eyes and their romance is sweet and real without being cloying.

I especially enjoyed the description of the Elves sweeping into the battle and routing the orcs and Haleth's first look at Caranthir. I also like their easy banter and how she pulls him out of his shell. The description of her dressing up, trying to make herself attractive, and that being a foreign feeling for her is both amusing and touching.

Even your OC gets a funny moment for himself, you never leave your characters hanging or just toss them in there like spear carriers. They always come off as real people who I can imagine living their lives outside the story.

And your song choice for the challenge and execution of the theme is perfection.

Anyway, enough rambling. This is just a great challenge entry and one I enjoyed reading as well as betaing. I'm glad you decided to write for this one.

I had all intentions of finishing in two-chapter segments but, once I started again, had to just bowl through to the ending. I loved it--all of it: the characterizations that I mentioned earlier, the bright point of romance amid the darkness of the First Age (something that I love about your stories and think I crave since mine are so often dark), the tenderness and gentle humor in their relationship, the bittersweet ending where--millennia after her death--he finally learns that she loved him.

(Which itself is illustrative of the insecurity that Haleth picks up on: his inability to understand why his followers show such affection for him, seeing it as mockery.)

> would have liked to read the story of Haleth which celebrates that she did not need a man to complete her life.

Oh bother, I hope you don't get criticism to this effect! For one, she didn't need him to COMPLETE her life (as she did not COMPLETE his!), and I think that's abundantly clear. And as you pointed out in the Haldad bio, Haleth is no Eowyn, whose courage leads her to a man and the decision that she doesn't need that warrior spirit--the core of her identity!--any more. You don't even give us a heartwrenching parting scene but something that ends, almost organically, as both Haleth and Caranthir serve their people.

Also, on that note, I really liked the implication that she was experienced and he was not. (Although I was mortified on his behalf that his mother read about his lovemaking prowess! :D)

And--last thing!--I adored how you worked in the lyrics and title to the song (and the name of the challenge! ;). It's funny because I've heard "Unchained Melody" a thousand times if I've heard it once; it was one that I contributed to the song list, and it was one of the first ones I put on because it's possibly my favorite outright love song, and it had to be there. And I'd never noticed the lyrics before (even though I guarantee that I can sing them by heart), and they fit perfectly.

Anyway--once again, I loved it. It was a beautiful, fun story and got me through my work today--thank you! :)

I love how... uncomplicated, for lack of a better word, you made their "courtship". No awkward pussyfooting, no misunderstandings, they've both got a crush on each other and determine quickly (enough) that the other loves them back. Not that there's anything wrong with a nice slow burn, but it was nonetheless satisfying to have things progressing so swiftly for a change, even if the happiness can't last.

I thoroughly liked your less gloomy, more gracious Caranthir, too! Your descriptions of the Noldor in general. And the shared jokes. And the warrior practice. As usual, you have fleshed out your story with so many wonderful details that the characters and their world really come alive while reading. I enjoyed it very much!

I loved this! Thank you for following up on the hint of the dairy. :) This was both sad, cute and funny and I thouroughly enjoyed reading it. 

I really love this! I love your description of the arrival of the Elven army--single-minded, lethal, fierce and implacable but stunning and beautiful at the same time. And then!! Their silence after was so moving. Caring for the dead and wounded. The image of the Elf cradling the wounded was lovely and poignant.

Ok he's only been in the story briefly so far but I love this Caranthir of yours. I like him in general but I really like this side of him when he's on his own, without his brothers. When in a way he can be himself, truly himself, without the preconceptions that come with so many of his other interactions. 

And Haleth made me laugh--finding him attractive! 

Very creative way to bring the song lyrics in!

nice underlying tension in their attraction to each other--I am sure he was very aware of their legs brushing!

i love this side of him--his lovely voice, but in the shadow of maglor's --nothing special in his opinion. 

Family heirloom for a song--nice one!!

but no heir to inherit it--heartbreaking because it was true for all of them except Curufin, whose son was from before it all went to hell.

Really love the detail of how his men tease him because, as Haleth says, they like him and respect him. It is so brutally obvious here how not quite enough and perhaps even inferior to his brothers he felt. 

As difficult and tragic as their time was in Beleriand I think for  Carantheir it was a place where he could distinguish himself from his brothers and be who he wanted to be--letting his natural leadership, warfare and negotiation skills shine when he didn't constantly have to do so in the shadow of his brothers. In many ways he flourished here, perhaps more than we would have in Tirion.

his inexperience is endearing and generous.

I've only read the first 3 chapters because I got interrupted!  But I thought I would leave some comments here before I continue otherwise I'll end up writing a book in this comment box (and how many words until I reach the limit?).

FIRST!  I LOVE Ignoblebard!  I love his stories.  Nobody can touch his ability to write humour!  But his writing is also always impeccable and he seems like such a lovely, caring person.  And so accommodating.  I just felt I had to throw him a bone.

On to your story!  

I think it's brilliant. And not only because of your characterizations and the way you make your characters come alive on the page, and your descriptions and the way you set the scene so I as reader can envisage exactly what everything looks like, and so that it feels like it's happening in real life, but the fact that structured this story around Caranthir's reading of Haleth's diary!  So that in my mind while I'm reading I am wondering what Caranthir is thinking while reading her words.

I also commend you for your ability to write about military...stuff.  If I have to write anything technical about a sword or even a horse...I sweat about it for days but usually I try to avoid doing it.

I find the sexual tension between Caranthir and Haleth is accelerating faster than their weapons flying at each other during their sword practice.  I can't wait to read the next chapter! 

I also loved how you used the title so flawlessly and effortlessly in the middle of the story.

To be continued...

I've just finished reading this wonderful story.  I thought the characterizations were brilliant as well as the setting - a story within a diary if you will - and I loved that you wrote an epilogue and author's notes!

"But I have written her as a warm and romantic sort. Many, looking back at long, eventful, and difficult lives, realize that love relationships often need to end. Knowing that does not kill the romance for all of us. Some of us, like me, turn to fantasy to find comfort in the age-old story of star-crossed lovers. Perhaps, like the author said above, this impulse is held in place by inertia."

This!  I remember thinking as a much younger woman that the daydreaming and anticipation of finding a beautiful, romantic lover was actually better than the reality of the lover one would eventually find.  I can see why teenagers lust over the latest Justin Bieber.  And in later years they will probably look back and find their memories of Bieber-love to be sweeter than their memories of their real boyfriends/husbands/whatevers.

Even a one-night stand in reality might hold sweeter memories than a long-term relationship that ended ugly.

I commend you for writing about this because it's the reality of today set in a highly romantic era thousands and thousands of years ago.  And *sigh* what woman wouldn't want a Caranthir in her life even if she's a well-equipped modern warrior with a busy enough life of her own?

The key to this I believe, is strength.  May we all acquire it.

I just want to say that I also loved this story's predecessor, The Manly-Hearted Woman.  I remember having trouble leaving a review.  I kept trying and trying, nothing seemed to be happening, so I ended up entering my review 5 times!  I deleted all but one because I was red-faced with embarrassment, but I'm not sure you ever saw it.  I just re-read it and it is not as bad as I thought, but that was a very difficult day for me!  I could hardly put one foot before the other.  I'm surprised I could write anything.  But I didn't want you to miss it because it was heartfelt and I wanted you to know how much I liked the story.

I like the relationship between Caranthir and Nerdanel here, as well as the central romance.