Comments on Bar-en-Eladar

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Gabriel has requested the following types of constructive criticism on this fanwork: Description/Imagery, Worldbuilding. All constructive criticism must follow our diplomacy guidelines.


I love how well you show Arathorn's grief in this story - it's a quiet grief, but his actions and thoughts show how deeply he feels it.  And the advice form his father was such a cool line! There's a lot of truth to it, and it does a great job showing how wise his father was.  It was also sweet to see how Gilraen was able to make him feel alive in the midst of his grief; she seems like she would be able to help him through it as they get to know each other better ♡

(And presuming I correctly understood the clue about the romance of Aragorn's parents, would you happen to have a Scavenger Hunt prompt for me?)